My fellow writing friend, Jeannie Lin, posted on her blog about Excerpt Monday this past Friday. I decided to go ahead and try it, even though what I have is pretty rough.
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The following is a blurb from my new project, a historical paranormal novel about the legendary Yuki-onna, currently titled Lady of the Snow.
I float along the wind, blending in with the blinding snow. Two men covered in straw coats and wide-brimmed bamboo hats struggle to make their way through the mountain pass, carrying piles of wood strapped to their backs. The smaller one stumbles in the deep snow, nearly losing his footing and falling off the edge of the narrow path to the dark valley below.
Watching their pathetic struggle against the elements makes me laugh. They will not survive the night with me following close behind.
Their last memory will be of my icy breath against their skin, taking their pitiful lives.
I’m outside the door of the shack where the two men found refuge. I could have easily taken their lives earlier but I thought I’d let them have a false sense of security in their ramshackle sanctuary.
What makes them think they will survive such a night in such a pitiful excuse for shelter? Even the ferryman had abandoned his little hut for the protection of the village at the base of the mountain, knowing that staying the night would put him at my mercy.
No fire-light comes from within; the shack is too small to build one. I smiled. Fire makes it more difficult for me to come close. I grow stronger with each cooling degree of the bitter winds.
The uneven weather-worn door is all that separates me from my prey. I fan my arms towards the door, directing the swirling winds towards it. It opens with ease.
I enter the hut, the snow-light from behind me illuminating the small space. The men lay huddled beneath their straw coats. I hold back laughter.
That would not deter me.
I float over to the first man. His weather worn face has certainly seen better years. His hair is streaked with black and gray. He looks remarkably peaceful in his slumber given the ordeal of his mountain trek. That serenity will soon turn to suffering once I touch him.
I bend over him and lay my fingers against his neck. His body jerks from my cold touch and his eyes fly open, staring into mine. He does not blink; I know my hypnotic gaze will prevent him from doing so. But I don’t miss the obvious fear in those eyes—the same look I’d see thousands of times before over the centuries.
The man knows death awaits him.
The muscles in his neck tensed and I can feel them trembling beneath my hand. The trembling soon extends throughout the rest of his body as it fights to maintain precious warmth. The blood pulsates through his neck faster, and his once calm breathing becomes quick and shallow.
I bend closer to the man’s face and blow my breath upon him. It comes out in a bright white smoke, encasing his face. I watch as his lips, ears and nose turn blue. The pulse in his neck slows with each passing moment as his blood chills in his veins. His eyes close and I know that his end is near.
Soon, the steady drumming of his heart ceases entirely. I remove my hand from his neck as a sense of fulfillment washes over me. Each life I take renews my strength.
A sharp intake of breath from my right jolts my brief revelry. I turn and see the other man lying on his blanket, staring at me.
He is barely more than a boy.
He opens his mouth in an attempt to cry out but one glance into my eyes and he becomes paralyzed.
I float over to him in an instant and reach out to touch his neck.
I’m inches away from beginning his death when some strange sort of human feeling comes over me…something akin to remorse.
I look at him again, inching my face closer to his. He is a handsome young man, with sharp cheekbones and a prominent lower jaw. And his eyes—there was no fear in them like there had been in the other man; he stares back at me with a mix of bravery and awe. But there is something else there in those deep brown irises, something that awakens a long forgotten memory.
A strange tingling bubbles up in my chest and I’d suddenly felt incredibly sad and forlorn, with an edge of sudden desire.
I hate how vulnerable he’s making me feel–something no human ever had done. I will not be swayed by a pretty face and brave front. He will die the same way as the other man.
But I couldn’t shake his gaze—now I was the one mesmerized.
Yeah, it’s my first draft so there’s lots of issues, but I polished what I could 🙂
Please check out some of the other participants in Excerpt Monday, too!
Christina De Lorenzo, YA (PG-13)
Kaige, Historical Romance (PG-13)
Jeannie Lin, Historical Romance (PG-13)
Bria Quinlan, Rom Com (PG)
MG Braden, Contemporary Romance (PG-13)
And don’t forget to head to Excerpt Monday’s site to read the whole list as well.